Saturday, September 8, 2012

My Query Critiqued

Okay, so I didn't think to do something that's probably pretty standard courtesy. My friend Matt over at The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment critiqued my query here, so now I'm linking you all over there to check out his awesome blog. Thank you, Matt!

For those of you who are interested, I posted the updated query in the My Novels section here.

Have a great day!

4 comments:

  1. I admit, I'm confused, are you looking for a query critique? You're on the GUTGAA query blog hop, but there doesn't seem to be anything here??

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    1. The blog hop for queries starts on Monday, I believe. On the blog hop list I linked the post which I will be publishing Monday morning or late tomorrow night. This post is about how Matt at the QQQE critiqued my query yesterday, for anyone who's interested in taking a look. Sorry to be confusing!

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  2. I like the updated query much better. I do question your word choice of self hate. I know what you're trying to say, but for some reason the word choice seems jarring, it doesn't match the flow of your pitch. Another nit would be this line-Still he feels choked by the evil acts he committed during his transformation, so he runs away from his memories by traveling to the mainland.-It feels detached. What about CHOKED BY THE EVIL DONE DURING HIS TRANSFORMATION, HE RUNS. Just a friendly suggestion.

    Good luck!

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    1. Thanks for the insights! They're much appreciated.

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